The Succeeder Stronghold

Phreddie · Post by **Phreddie** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 7:57 pm

[QUOTE=Damuna_Nova]Will he offer to shine my shoes for 10 rupees?[/QUOTE]
Not that kind of Indian, his parents are respectable doctors, or so I assume...

Damuna_Nova · Post by **Damuna_Nova** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 7:59 pm

[QUOTE=Phreddie]Not that kind of Indian, his parents are respectable doctors, or so I assume...[/QUOTE]

Ah, Cheapo Indian.

Lestat · Post by **Lestat** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 7:59 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]<snip>
Rohan's been done already in a novel.[/QUOTE]Yes, it was the country north of the white mountains in the Lord of the Rings.

And also the first name of one of my colleagues in Liberia...

So what?

Magrus · Post by **Magrus** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:01 pm

[QUOTE=Oscuro_Sol]Nooo, it's embarrassing!!

Erggg what's that word that's like anyways but different? My brain died ...[/QUOTE]

Why's that?

I think you'd be a great writer. You're passionate and creative.

I dunno.

@ Lestat, I knew about the LoTR reference, I was actually thinking of one of the main characters in a fantasy series by Melanie Rawn.

Lestat · Post by **Lestat** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:03 pm

Well its fantasy potential gets a bit diminished when connected with a 60 year old consultant

Oscuro_Sol · Post by **Oscuro_Sol** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:05 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]Why's that?

I think you'd be a great writer. You're passionate and creative.

I dunno.

[/QUOTE]
I dunno... it's bad.. I don't like it.. just about this girl who meets one of her heroes, then it goes into this flashback about how her life is absolute crap at home.
I'm not a good writer

I used to be, like in grade 5/6. :laugh: Dunno what happened to me.

I think it was however... I dunno I can't think ATM

Damuna_Nova · Post by **Damuna_Nova** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:06 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]Why's that?

I think you'd be a great writer. You're passionate and creative. [/QUOTE]

That'd probably go down better if you weren't trying to get her into the sack.

Magrus · Post by **Magrus** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:07 pm

@ Lestat, What the hell does that have to do with anything beyond a snobbish attitude of the reader in question?

[QUOTE=Oscuro Sol]I dunno... it's bad.. I don't like it.. just about this girl who meets one of her heroes, then it goes into this flashback about how her life is absolute crap at home.
I'm not a good writer I used to be, like in grade 5/6. Dunno what happened to me.

I think it was however... I dunno I can't think ATM[/QUOTE]

Hmm, well, another night, one which I'm not drunk, I'd be happy to read it and give you some pointers if you would like. I used to write a lot, I don't do much beyond write in my journal anymore.

@ Damuna, You're a boorish ass.

Oscuro_Sol · Post by **Oscuro_Sol** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:09 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]Hmm, well, another night, one which I'm not drunk, I'd be happy to read it and give you some pointers if you would like. I used to write a lot, I don't do much beyond write in my journal anymore.[/QUOTE]
It's due Wednesday...
:speech: I'm so scareddd! I'm not even finished. It's supposed to be a short story, like three pages, but mine's already 13 pages and I'm only half done...

I wanted to change my idea but it's a little late now... AND I had to take out all the swears so it's gonna lose all the effect I wanted it to have initially

Damuna_Nova · Post by **Damuna_Nova** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:11 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]@ Damuna, You're a boorish ass.[/QUOTE]

*Bows* I do my best.

Kitten, why not ask Lestat for the same words in another language?

Magrus · Post by **Magrus** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:11 pm

[QUOTE=Oscuro_Sol]It's due Wednesday...
:speech: I'm so scareddd! I'm not even finished. It's supposed to be a short story, like three pages, but mine's already 13 pages and I'm only half done...

I wanted to change my idea but it's a little late now... AND I had to take out all the swears so it's gonna lose all the effect I wanted it to have initially

[/QUOTE]

You write like I do....I got into trouble in my 9th grade English class for my short story being too long and having too many characters. Aside from that it was near to being perfectly written however. I am just long-winded and when inspired, I keep writing. My 6 page short story was 30 pages.

@ DN, Well, it sucks. Not only are you pissing me off, I'm fairly certain you're making the lady uncomfortable as well.

Oscuro_Sol · Post by **Oscuro_Sol** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:14 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]You write like I do....I got into trouble in my 9th grade English class for my short story being too long and having too many characters. Aside from that it was near to being perfectly written however. I am just long-winded and when inspired, I keep writing. My 6 page short story was 30 pages.

[/QUOTE]
I have barely any characters... about four main ones, like three lesser ones that are mentioned only a few times... but the story is so farking long

This girl and her friend have to go to a concert, she has to go to the hospital, she has to meet the guy, she has to talk with him a few days, she has to go into the flashback and tell him about her entire life

rolleyes

THEN he has to die and then SHE has to go to this place and cry a bit then I have to conclude it... *groan*

Magrus · Post by **Magrus** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:16 pm

[QUOTE=Oscuro_Sol]I have barely any characters... about four main ones, like three lesser ones that are mentioned only a few times... but the story is so farking long

This girl and her friend have to go to a concert, she has to go to the hospital, she has to meet the guy, she has to talk with him a few days, she has to go into the flashback and tell him about her entire life

rolleyes

THEN he has to die and then SHE has to go to this place and cry a bit then I have to conclude it... *groan*[/QUOTE]

Yeah, I was told 1 main, and at most 3 minor characters for my story. I suggest, if you want a good grade, redoing the concept of your store to figure that in. Even if it does compromise your idea and what you want. Writing for a class and grade is different than writing for your own pleasure. It's like producing work for money, you do what you are assigned. You are being graded on following directions, not just writing technique.

Oscuro_Sol · Post by **Oscuro_Sol** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:19 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]Yeah, I was told 1 main, and at most 3 minor characters for my story. I suggest, if you want a good grade, redoing the concept of your store to figure that in. Even if it does compromise your idea and what you want. Writing for a class and grade is different than writing for your own pleasure. It's like producing work for money, you do what you are assigned. You are being graded on following directions, not just writing technique.[/QUOTE]
Well I'm not that concerned about my mark... I know I'll get at least an 80% because my teacher likes me, and that'll be good, because my LA mark is generally pretty high, so my year final mark will probably be in the high 80's/low 90's even if I do blow this story... my main focus in writing this is to put an impression on my teacher.. and anyone else to happens to read it. It's kinda about the whole gay discrimination sorta thing.

Lestat · Post by **Lestat** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:19 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]@ Lestat, What the hell does that have to do with anything beyond a snobbish attitude of the reader in question?[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE=Magrus - earlier]Rohan's been done already in a novel.[/QUOTE]
[QUOTE=Lestat]Yes, it was the country north of the white mountains in the Lord of the Rings.

And also the first name of one of my colleagues in Liberia...

So what?[/QUOTE][QUOTE=Magrus]@ Lestat, I knew about the LoTR reference, I was actually thinking of one of the main characters in a fantasy series by Melanie Rawn.[/QUOTE][QUOTE=Lestat]Well its fantasy potential gets a bit diminished when connected with a 60 year old consultant[/QUOTE]
There

Damuna_Nova · Post by **Damuna_Nova** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:21 pm

That's quite a lot of quotes.

Lestat · Post by **Lestat** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:23 pm

[QUOTE=Damuna_Nova]That's quite a lot of quotes.[/QUOTE]
Jealous?

Magrus · Post by **Magrus** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:23 pm

*shrugs* I miss your point. Someone used a name for a country/character which happens to also be a name for someone you knew? So what? If "fantasy" was required to involve something completely original, there would be very little fantasy being made after a certain period of time. It is based on twisting things to make something that isn't prevalent in real life as an end result. If I were to put the name "Michael" to a character in a story about people who could fly and change shape, it would still be fantasy. Regardless of the fact it involved flying, which birds can do, and a very common male name.

@ Kitten, Well then, kudos to you for taking a lower grade to make a point. I'd say go for what you think is best then, and if needed, I'd be happy to take a look at it.

Ugh one of the reasons we left, the whole stroking on an intellectual ego bull****. I'm off Kitten. Feel free to contact me if you wish through email or chat.

Oscuro_Sol · Post by **Oscuro_Sol** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:25 pm

Magrus wrote:@ Kitten, Well then, kudos to you for taking a lower grade to make a point. I'd say go for what you think is best then, and if needed, I'd be happy to take a look at it.

Thanks, might let you read it when it's finished sometime... but it's stupid so I might not

Ugh one of the reasons we left, the whole stroking on an intellectual ego bull****. I'm off Kitten. Feel free to contact me if you wish through email or chat.

Okay Maggy

Talk to you later.

Lestat · Post by **Lestat** » Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:44 pm

[QUOTE=Magrus]Ugh one of the reasons we left, the whole stroking on an intellectual ego bull****.[/QUOTE]Ugh, that's one thing to call it...
Mainly a wrong thing though