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Sytze · Post by **Sytze** » Thu Jan 20, 2005 12:51 pm

[QUOTE=Yeltsu](while I try to move the story forewards a bit

)[/QUOTE]

Will that be sooner, or later?

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Thu Jan 20, 2005 12:59 pm

Lol, I'm actually in the process of writing the story now, expect it later tonight

(yes am sorry for the delay, but it takes ages for me to come up with something, and actually figuring out how to write it)

Sytze · Post by **Sytze** » Thu Jan 20, 2005 1:12 pm

Ok, sorry, I'll take that into consideration next time. How long should we give you before asking what's taking you? Four days, is that fair?

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Thu Jan 20, 2005 1:14 pm

That's good, thanks for understanding

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Thu Jan 20, 2005 3:39 pm

My part is up, I hoped you enjoyed it, maybe some of you noticed a few of my easter eggs there.

EDIT: Woah! We have now written 29 145 words, something which equals 48 pages, (in font 12, times new roman) and 162 047 signs total

werebeargoddess · Post by **werebeargoddess** » Thu Jan 20, 2005 5:25 pm

I think, as far as the romance for Kitty goes, I'll go for Sytze. It's not official, and I might still change my mind to Stanislav, but this is about how it is set. Some feedback on this would be welcome before I make my final decision.

Sytze · Post by **Sytze** » Fri Jan 21, 2005 3:04 am

[QUOTE=Yeltsu]EDIT: Woah! We have now written 29 145 words, something which equals 48 pages, (in font 12, times new roman) and 162 047 signs total

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We could compose a book of our story.

You introduced a lot of new elements, but I'm not sure which you consider eastern eggs, though.

Anyway, I'll go next.

@wgoddes: Choose as you see fit. I will not interfere with your thoughts about this triangle thing. I'll try to throw in a few dialogs in my part, including a few things Phaere told me, but you will have to make up your mind yourself. If the choice becomes too hard, tell me and I'll come up with something that will make the decision easier.

Golden Lion 86 · Post by **Golden Lion 86** » Fri Jan 21, 2005 7:23 am

[QUOTE=werebeargoddess]I think, as far as the romance for Kitty goes, I'll go for Sytze. It's not official, and I might still change my mind to Stanislav, but this is about how it is set. Some feedback on this would be welcome before I make my final decision.[/QUOTE]

Allrighty then.

May I ask what I did wrong?

werebeargoddess · Post by **werebeargoddess** » Fri Jan 21, 2005 7:46 pm

You didn't do anything wrong.

It's just,well, I think Sytze would be a better choice for her. You said yourself a couple days ago that they might run into problems later on, seeing how he is two or three times her size. And he is still a bit young for that kind of relationship, don't you think? And also, she and Sytze see eye-toeye on a number of things. They both serve nature, and they are both more comfortable outside in the wilderness. Sytze is older than her, and quite mature. Sytze can identify with a number o her ideals, seeing as he is a ranger and she is a druid. I don't mean to slap you in the face or anything, but I think that Sytze is a slightly better candidate. But I don't see that she and Stanislav can't be friends, even if they are not lovers. It's up to you, really, if you want Stanislav to still be friends with her, even if she has someone else for a lover.

Golden Lion 86 · Post by **Golden Lion 86** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 12:48 am

[QUOTE=werebeargoddess]You didn't do anything wrong.

It's just,well, I think Sytze would be a better choice for her. You said yourself a couple days ago that they might run into problems later on, seeing how he is two or three times her size. And he is still a bit young for that kind of relationship, don't you think? And also, she and Sytze see eye-toeye on a number of things. They both serve nature, and they are both more comfortable outside in the wilderness. Sytze is older than her, and quite mature. Sytze can identify with a number o her ideals, seeing as he is a ranger and she is a druid. I don't mean to slap you in the face or anything, but I think that Sytze is a slightly better candidate. But I don't see that she and Stanislav can't be friends, even if they are not lovers. It's up to you, really, if you want Stanislav to still be friends with her, even if she has someone else for a lover.[/QUOTE]

Of course. I didn't mean to be so inquisitive about it, and I see no reason to abandon friendship.

The choice is yours, and whatever will make Kitty happy will do for me.

Actually, PS: What I meant to ask with the first question is whyyou chose my guy to begin with.

werebeargoddess · Post by **werebeargoddess** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 9:29 am

Well, Stanislav was the first real human friend that she's had since her village was destroyed, and since at the time he was her only friend besides Phraen, I figured he was good for her.

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 12:08 pm

Excellent post(s) Sytze, good work

Sytze · Post by **Sytze** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 1:02 pm

Thank you

Wgoddess is up, I believe? And anyone already came up with a different title?

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 2:04 pm

I had one, but I forgot it, I think it was "The/A Band of Strangers" or something like that

Golden Lion 86 · Post by **Golden Lion 86** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 2:49 pm

I just read the last two parts, and I have to say that the last one just plain shocked me. I mean, I knew full well you would choose Sytze, but that part makes out Stanislav as an inconsiderate person. I mean, he didn't carry Kitty to safety and healing, to the exclusion of everything else, just to abandon her to go play with some stupid teenagers. He would have been right there with her, or just outside if he thought she didn't want him to see her undressed.

One way or another, he loves her every bit as much as Sytze does, and he loses out at the end because Kitty loves Sytze more, and not because he loves Kitty less. I thought my post "convalescence" made it clear enough that he would only rest when Kitty was well. Since Kitty was still hurt, it should strike one as reasonable that he would not leave her side until she was fully healed.

I would very much appreciate if that part could be amended, since my guy is played radically out of character here. If you wish to choose Sytze, you MUST officially reject Stanislav. He should be there with her. Don't hesitate to make him a bit jealous, if he must be flawed in some way, but once again, don't make him evil jealous. Just make him normal jealous. An angry look at Sytze perhaps, but no unkind words to Sytze, and most certainly none to Kitty.

I am sorry if this strikes you as a whiny post, but this is a critical point in our story's deveopment, and I hate to see my guy put up as the egotistic type. A little immature, perhaps, but egotistical, definitely not.

I understand that you are trying to escape the moral dilemma of rejecting one of the suitors, but I strongly disagree with making my guy the inconsiderate jackass all of a sudden. Just come out and say to his face why it cannot be.

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 3:14 pm

Just let it be GL, you can make a note in your next part about how stan and sytze talked things out, and stanislav, being the better man, realised that he was just a friend to kitty, and that sytze was the one she loved, or something like that.

btw WGB you had a rather serious typo in the second line of your post, you wrote Kina instead of Kitty (Kina is the Norwegian word for China

)

werebeargoddess · Post by **werebeargoddess** » Sat Jan 22, 2005 3:56 pm

okay, I've made a couple changes. I edited the part about Stan, and I changed the name "Kina" to Kitty. The reason I accidently put that is because the main character of a story that I am writing (found at wizards.com) is named Kina Mari, and is often just reffered to as Kina.

EDIT- I agree, I think it would be a good idea if someone includes some dialog between Sytze and Stan about the whole romance deal.

Golden Lion 86 · Post by **Golden Lion 86** » Sun Jan 23, 2005 2:36 am

[QUOTE=Yeltsu]Just let it be GL, you can make a note in your next part about how stan and sytze talked things out, and stanislav, being the better man, realised that he was just a friend to kitty, and that sytze was the one she loved, or something like that.

btw WGB you had a rather serious typo in the second line of your post, you wrote Kina instead of Kitty (Kina is the Norwegian word for China

)[/QUOTE]

I'm not a big whiner, you all know that, and when something is small enough to let go of, I do. But this is different. This was like making Duncan tuck tail and run. Like making Rethne into a care bear. It's just not right.

Anyway, thank you for the changes, WBG. Am I next? IIRC, there are now 4 of us, Cipher and Ungor having been out of sight for a while.

Sytze · Post by **Sytze** » Sun Jan 23, 2005 3:41 am

You're next, yes. I'm not sure about ungor and cipher, though. I recall cipher saying he would be back in a couple of weeks. The possibility of his return is still there, but I think ungor simply left us.

Yeltsu · Post by **Yeltsu** » Sun Jan 23, 2005 5:30 am

[QUOTE=Sytze]You're next, yes. I'm not sure about ungor and cipher, though. I recall cipher saying he would be back in a couple of weeks. The possibility of his return is still there, but I think ungor simply left us.[/QUOTE]

So you didn't get any reply on the emails you sent them?