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- werebeargoddess
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@WBG: Not trepidation as in fearing that it might be bad, rather trepidation in knowing that it will be good, and I can't wait to read it.
Sorry if I made you think I don't like your writing, you know I do. I was just trying to say it more elequently
@demo: Don't feel bad man, the drunken bug is great, we needed some comic relief in the story
@demo: Don't feel bad man, the drunken bug is great, we needed some comic relief in the story
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- Demortis
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WBG, you still workin on it or have things come up? just wonderin, havent heard anything for a while so im just curious.
Zombies are not real! The Government is still doin Human trails!
Have you ever wondered why, in a dream you can touch a falling sky? Or fly to the heavens that watch over you. - Godsmack
Have you ever wondered why, in a dream you can touch a falling sky? Or fly to the heavens that watch over you. - Godsmack
- werebeargoddess
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well i was kinda figurin that, but didnt know, thats why i asked. just at your own time, but im sure we would like updates, and where the smeg is GL?
Zombies are not real! The Government is still doin Human trails!
Have you ever wondered why, in a dream you can touch a falling sky? Or fly to the heavens that watch over you. - Godsmack
Have you ever wondered why, in a dream you can touch a falling sky? Or fly to the heavens that watch over you. - Godsmack
Ack, I had totally forgotten about this. Well, that and I've been incredible busy. My sincere apologies.
I will try to contribute to this story, should it still be alive and, more importantly, if people are still willing to continue it. We've lost cipher and ungor over time and I haven’t seen GL in a while. Furthermore, I don't know when I can post.. My exams will be over around the 22nd of June, so I should be able to get back to full-time writing business around that time. Maybe I can get a part off the ground before that, but I prefer it if wgoddess wrote her part first.
@Dem: I don't think there's anything wrong with your story itself, it's rather the way you told it. I think you're giving us more of a summary (i.e.: Stan says, Demorte asks, Stan replies, Demorte says, Stan says, etc.) than that you're explaining how people feel, what they do, how the surroundings look, etc. But hey, that's what this thread is partially for, right? Learning how to write a story, get a bit of a fantasy feel, so forth. Also, there's no problem with your character. A bit of conflict within a group can always be nice, the same goes for the obvious comedy value.
I will try to contribute to this story, should it still be alive and, more importantly, if people are still willing to continue it. We've lost cipher and ungor over time and I haven’t seen GL in a while. Furthermore, I don't know when I can post.. My exams will be over around the 22nd of June, so I should be able to get back to full-time writing business around that time. Maybe I can get a part off the ground before that, but I prefer it if wgoddess wrote her part first.
@Dem: I don't think there's anything wrong with your story itself, it's rather the way you told it. I think you're giving us more of a summary (i.e.: Stan says, Demorte asks, Stan replies, Demorte says, Stan says, etc.) than that you're explaining how people feel, what they do, how the surroundings look, etc. But hey, that's what this thread is partially for, right? Learning how to write a story, get a bit of a fantasy feel, so forth. Also, there's no problem with your character. A bit of conflict within a group can always be nice, the same goes for the obvious comedy value.
"Sometimes Dreams are wiser than waking"
- werebeargoddess
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ok, thanks Sytze, i thought no one was wanting to write becuase of the way i wrote.... oh well, ill try and do better next time.
and so ill write after Yelt, good to see things getting started again
time for me to come up with smart ass comments and wise sayings

and so ill write after Yelt, good to see things getting started again
Zombies are not real! The Government is still doin Human trails!
Have you ever wondered why, in a dream you can touch a falling sky? Or fly to the heavens that watch over you. - Godsmack
Have you ever wondered why, in a dream you can touch a falling sky? Or fly to the heavens that watch over you. - Godsmack